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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart indicates places to arrange the dance
classes
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,
while
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 the other diagram below illustrates the division of dance
classes
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 into two age groups.
Overall
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, private studios seem to be the best choice for
students
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 who want to learn dancing.
In addition
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, ballet and modern
classes
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 are highly attended among groups under
eleven
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 and from age
eleven
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 to sixteen, respectively. As can be seen, the percentage of private studios is
highest
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, which takes almost half of all dance class participants.
This
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 is followed by school halls, which are attended quarter by a of
students
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.
Moreover
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, the scale of community halls and other locations is only 18%, and the
last
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 one is college-based studios with a proportion of 10%. Regarding the bar chart, it is evaluated based on two age groups. The attendees in the under
eleven
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 group seem to enjoy most in the ballet
classes
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;
whereas
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, the number of
students
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 from
eleven
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 to sixteen years old is only half.
In contrast
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, the participation of the younger group is lowest in the modern
classes
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, but there are over 500
students
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 in the other group.
Besides
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, tap boasts a roughly equal number of participants across both cohorts.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, students, eleven with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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