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The diagramn below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

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The diagram illustrates the process of making instant noodles in steps.
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, there are eight steps in how instant noodles are manufactured. From taking the flour from storage silos
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 selling ready boodle cups to the public. As the diagram shows first step is that flour is taken from storage silos and delivered to the fabric. After that, water and oil are mixed in the mixer
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 mixture is put on dough sheets a rolled through.
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 mixture is turned into dough strips .
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 these strips are transformed into noodle discs. The next stage is that these discs are cooked with oil and dried into combine. Afterwards, everything is put into a cup with vegetables and spices. And final step is that these cups are labelled and ready to be sold.
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Improving the logical sequence of sentences and paragraphs will make the stages clearer.
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Use more specific language to describe each step in the process to improve comprehension.
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Ensure grammatical accuracy to boost clarity of ideas.
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The essay provides a clear overview of the entire process, covering all stages from beginning to end.
coherence cohesion
The introductory sentence successfully outlines the process being described.
coherence cohesion
Satisfactory presence of introduction and conclusion.

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