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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the location of a
school
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 in the year 2004, and how it will develop in 2024.
Overall
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, it is evident that the number of students will increase in 2024, and the
school
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's site will witness significant changes. The number of students will increase from 600 to 1000. There are several notable transformations that will occur.
Firstly
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, a new
car
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park
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 will be constructed on the upper right hand,
along with
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 a new road will be introduced to connect
car
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park
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 1 with
car
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park
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 2;
however
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, the green area will be retracted.
Secondly
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, there will be three
school
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 buildings
instead
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 of two , the third
school
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 building will be built
instead
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 of the location of the sports field,
while
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 the sports field will be relocated into the recreational area just below the second parking area. Ultimately, the two old
school
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 buildings will be joined by a specific corridor, and a path will be connected with the third building. Despite these changes, the main entrance, main road, and first
car
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park
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 will remain in their positions, which are located on the left hand of the map.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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