The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the two pie charts illustrate the

sales

of online shopping for retail sectors in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010

respectivly

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respectively

overall

, there is an

incrase

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increase

food

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the food

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and beverage sector,

moreover

increase

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an increase

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in the

vedio

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video

games sector as well.

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constract

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contrast

contract

, the other two sectors home & furnishings and electronics have

experinced

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experienced

a decrease.

firstly

, in the year 2005 food and beverages were approximately one-fifth of the retail sector

sales

however

, it

experinced

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experienced

a rise by the year 2010

reached

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reaching

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up to 32%.

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2005

vedio

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video

games were the least

saleas

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sales

percentage among

others

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other

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sectors with 18%,

then

in the other period it rose

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to 23

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secondly

, in 2005 electronics and

appliance

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appliances

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were represent

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represented

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35% of the total

sales

in Canada, after that in 2010 it

diclined

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declined

until it reached 35%

at the end

of the period.

moreover

home

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the home

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and furnishings

sales

rate was 25% in the

begining

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beginning

, after that it

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apply

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experinced

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experienced

a significant fall by the year 2010 representing the least

sales

reate

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rate

create

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

166 words

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