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Band 6

Write a letter when you missed our important training at your workplace

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I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to sincerely apologize for missing the training session organized by
esteemed
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the esteemed
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 corporation. I understand the importance of
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 valuable learning for the entire employees. The reason for my absence was unintentional as my grandfather has been suffering from kidney failure. On the day of
meeting
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the meeting
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, he incurred severe abdominal pain that
needs
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a
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apply
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dialysis treatment in
the
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urgency.
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, I prioritize my
granddad
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 health crisis over the official meeting;
for
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this
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 reason, it was not possible to complete both
the
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tasks at the same time. I kindly request
a
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access
of
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 recordings, materials or resources shared during the session so that I can catch up with new modifications for
objective
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 of more production in the business. If necessary, I am
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 willing to meet colleagues or attend a follow-up session to cover what I missed. Once again, I really apologize for the inconvenience I gave to you and I
assures
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that
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you that
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this
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 will not happen again. Thank you for your patience and understanding. Yours faithfully, Sarab

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Task Achievement
Ensure all the details needed to address any potential concerns are included. It's also good to mention any other steps you are taking to manage future unforeseen circumstances.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to keep ideas in separate paragraphs more distinct to enhance clarity and comprehension.
Task Achievement
The tone is very appropriate for a formal letter and conveys sincerity, understanding, and willingness to make up for the absence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are polite and formal, suitable for a workplace setting.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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