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Today,the high sakes of popular consumers goods reflects the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do u agree or disagree

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Nowadays, a large number of
consumers
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 often
purchase
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 goods
such
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 as clothes, cosmetic products, and food that they
are
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do
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 not
needed
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need
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 which reflects the power of advertising. I completely agree with
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 because
ads
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 use a variety of techniques to manipulate and persuade
consumers
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. These techniques include emotional
appeals
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, social
cues
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, and
cognaitive
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cognitive
biases
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. Emotional
appeals
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 are one of the most effective ways to
pursuade
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persuade
consumers
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.
Ads
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 that use emotional
appeals
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 tap into the individual's emotions,
tiggering
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triggering
 feelings of happiness, fear or sadness.
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,
this
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 could lead the
consumers
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 to make
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purchase
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made
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based
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 on their emotional response, rather than a rational decision.
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, perfume advertisements often show their items by hiring
a beautiful women
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beautiful women
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 who lives a luxurious lifestyle;
as a result
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, costumers could
purchase
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 these perfumes because they think it may provide them a
glamorouse
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glamorous
 life. Social
cues
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is
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 another way that
ads
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 manipulate individuals.
Ads
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 may feature social
cues
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,
such
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 as celebrities or popular products, to make the
consumers
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 feel like they are part of a group.
This
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 can create a sense of belonging, making people more likely to make a
purchase
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.
Additionally
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, cognitive
biases
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 are another technique used by advertisers. Cognitive
biases
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 are mental shortcuts, that our brain
take
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 when we make decisions.
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,
ads
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 may use cognitive
biases
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 to influence
the
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one's decision-making process,
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 as by farming the product in a positive light, using scarcity to create a sense of urgency, or offering a discount. In conclusion, I agree with
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 statement because advertising plays a significant role in influencing
consumers
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' purchasing habits by using different strategies for
pursuading
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persuading
 people. These techniques involve emotional
appeals
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, social
cues
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, and cognitive
biases
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.
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clarity accuracy
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structure
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
logical structure
You used logical subdivisions to break down the arguments about advertising techniques, adding clarity to the essay.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high stakes
  • consumer goods
  • advertising power
  • real need
  • society
  • persuasive advertisements
  • artificial needs
  • social status
  • trends
  • consumer manipulation
  • psychological tactics
  • impulsive buying
  • distortion
  • basic needs
  • luxury desires
  • economic implications
  • perceived value
  • consumer awareness
  • informed consumers
  • marketing-driven appeal
  • consumer culture
  • essential living patterns
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