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People are living in a ‘throwaway society,’ using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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In many places, people carelessly discard their
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, largely because society has ignored the problem and failed to address it.
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 can lead to catastrophic consequences,
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 as air and water pollution, which could harm both land and sea creatures in the long term. Industrial cities are among the most dangerous areas in terms of littering. These cities often host popular restaurants, cafes, and catering establishments, attracting hundreds of visitors daily.
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, recycling bins fill up much more quickly than in rural areas.
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, processed foods have become increasingly common, contributing to the growing amount of
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. If left unaddressed,
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 trend could lead to streets overflowing with litter. Another significant issue is the widespread use of single-use items,
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 as packaging for snacks like cocoa, pistachios, and crisps. Teenagers,
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, consume these items daily and often discard the wrappers improperly.
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 careless
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 could have a lasting impact if not curbed. In my town,
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, many young people ignore signage that indicates where
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 should be disposed of.
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, they throw trash wherever it's convenient, contributing to the problem. In conclusion, improper
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 disposal not only creates health problems but
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 affects the mental well-being of the community. People need to be educated on proper disposal methods, and the government must regulate and enforce measures to address
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 growing issue.
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Task Achievement
Consider elaborating on the specific reasons behind society's neglect of waste problems beyond just the failure to address it. This will provide a deeper insight into the root causes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is well-organized, but you could strengthen the logical flow by linking some of the points more explicitly. Adding transitional phrases will help the reader follow your arguments more seamlessly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay introduces the issue of waste disposal effectively and concludes with a clear call to action, which guides the reader through the argument and emphasizes the importance of addressing the issue.
Task Achievement
Specific examples such as 'recycling bins filling up' and 'frequent consumption of processed foods' are nicely tied to the argument about increased waste, strengthening your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throwaway society
  • consumer culture
  • material possession
  • status symbol
  • planned obsolescence
  • disposable items
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • environmental impact
  • waste management
  • sustainability
  • immediate gratification
  • psychological implications
  • resource consumption
  • advertising influence
  • economic effects
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