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Band 3.5

Students should not have homework bevause they already study enough at school. Do you agree or disagree?

An increasing number of people
to
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discuss with each other
about
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that
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 children in
school
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 should not do
homework
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 or
given
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 any other tasks
from
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 teachers. I
am totally disagree
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 with that situation. There are several reasons for
this
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. At the outset, there are two main causes for the gradual
wanning
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waning
winning
 of should not
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 their
homework
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 before
the
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school
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.
Firstly
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, the time
alloted
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allotted
allowed
allocated
 for teaching in
school
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 is limited to about
45minutes
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45 minutes
, which means some
students
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 do not acquire enough knowledge.
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, some of the
students
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 do not study enough at
school
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. In my opinion,
homework
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 provides an opportunity for them to practice skills , and work independently.
Thorough
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homework
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,
students
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 can learn how to manage their time and take responsibility for their learning. On the one hand, for younger children too much
homework
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 can lead to full of stress and lack of balance in their study time.
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, it might even result in
students
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 losing interest in learning altogether.
This
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 is why some people believe that
homework
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 should be completely banned . After spending hours in class , which can lead to anxiety, exhaustion or
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not getting enough sleep at night. In conclusion,
homework
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is
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 an important role
of
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in
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 our educational growth, but it has to be managed carefully.I still believe that it is
necessary
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a necessary
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 aspect of education

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coherence and cohesion
To improve clarity, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Make sure each point is clearly explained and linked to the question. Particularly, focus on improving transitions between ideas for better cohesion.
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Make your position in the introduction clearer. Express your disagreement more explicitly and briefly outline the reasons before delving into details.
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Develop your ideas more comprehensively. Use relevant and specific examples that directly relate to the topic to enhance your argument.
general
Remove some grammatical inconsistencies and improve sentence structure to enhance readability and comprehension.
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Consider adding more evidence or examples when discussing the negative aspects of homework to balance the argument.
coherence and cohesion
You presented a clear conclusion, summarizing your point of view effectively, which is an important aspect of a well-rounded essay.
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The essay successfully acknowledges counterarguments regarding homework's impact on students, reflecting an understanding of different perspectives.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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