In some countries, Students are required to learn a foreign language. But, in other countries, people believe that they do not have to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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in
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. The first type required
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to learn
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a foreign
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language
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.
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,
other
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type believes that
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do not have to
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other
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language
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in
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. Based on my personal experience, I am more
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to the first type. For
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that have
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mother tongue
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other than
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the government make policies for
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to learn foreign
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, especially
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, at
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. Their youngster
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to master
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in order to interact with global communities. In Indonesia, it is mandatory for
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to
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English
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from elementary
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to high
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.
Hence
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, Indonesian
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are familiar with
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which is very
usefull
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useful
for them to read
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text books
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the unversity
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unversity
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university
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countries
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with
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as their native
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do not feel the urge to learn
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language
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, in the US, other
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is not a mandatory subject in
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. Children who like to learn other languages could take courses after
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hours. Or else, they can
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foreign
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when they are in university. In conclusion, the need to master other
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become the main
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for
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to require their youngsters to
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foreign languages or not. For
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speaking
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, it is important to immerse their young population
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global
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the global
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community, by making them
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English
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are their native
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, there is no urge to do
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. In my experience as an Indonesian, it is essential for me to learn
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because it will expand my world
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abroad.
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task achievement
While the essay gives a clear stance, ensuring all arguments are fully expanded and tightly connected to the thesis would strengthen the task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets up the discussion well, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the points. However, coherence could be improved by using more linking words to guide the reader through the argument seamlessly.
task achievement
The essay clearly introduces two opposing views and provides a personal opinion, covering all aspects of the task.
coherence cohesion
The points are logically organized, with paragraphs devoted to specific viewpoints.
task achievement
Examples like Indonesia's education policy on teaching English are relevant and help illustrate the points being made.

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