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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart depicts the consequences of a survey about people's habits which
coffee
 and tea buying and drinking in
last
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the last
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 four
weeks
 in five different Australian cities.
Overall
, The most number of people went to
cafe
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cafes
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for drinking
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to drink
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coffee
 or tea
while
 the
least
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lowest
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 percentage of
residents
 bought fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
.
According to
bar
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a bar
the bar
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 chart,
habit
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the habit
a habit
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 of going to
cafe
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a cafe
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more
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is more
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commen
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common
 than other habits at over 55
percent
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per cent
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, being
exception
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the exception
an exception
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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Adelaide
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of Adelaide
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residents
 just under 50 in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
.
Second
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The second
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 most
fameous
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famous
 habit was buying instant
coffee
 in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart by 45%, around 47%, over 50% and just under 55%, respectively in
last
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the last
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 4
weeks
.
It is clear that
all
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in all
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 of the cities in
Asutralia
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Australia
, buying fresh
coffe
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coffee
 was
less
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a less
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 common
habits
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habit
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between
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among
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residents
. Around 34
percent
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per cent
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 of Brisbane's citizens
prefered
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preferred
 fresh
coffee
whereas
 Sydney's people chose
buying
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to buy
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 fresh
coffee
 just over around 2%
from
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of
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Melborne'
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Melborne's
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residents
. About 38
percent
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per cent
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 of
community
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the community
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 in Hobart
prefered
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preferred
 buying
fresg
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fresh
coffee
 rather than others.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, weeks, residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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