The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The line graphs
demontrate
the variation Correct your spelling
demonstrate
the
quantity of electrical household Change preposition
in the
devices
and Use synonyms
amount
of spent Correct article usage
the amount
time
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for
housework in one country during one century(1920-2019).
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on
Overall
, in the first diagram, there are 3 different Linking Words
devices
, namely vacuum Use synonyms
cleanerm
washing machine and refrigerator. The amount Correct your spelling
cleaner
cleaners
all
of Correct pronoun usage
apply
them
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apply
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this
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this device
these devices
devices
increased in showed period(1920-2019), Use synonyms
nevertheless
the number of Linking Words
hours
of housework per week decreased that Use synonyms
time
.
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Initially
, the refrigerator`s changes seem different from others. In 1920 there Linking Words
are
very few people Wrong verb form
were
to use
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using
this
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intrument
, Correct your spelling
instrument
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however
there was a sharp increase from 1920 to 1980 and Add a comma
however,
this
instrument reached 100 Linking Words
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percentage
in 1980. After 1980 there was not any change for Replace the word
per cent
this
device. The washing machine started Linking Words
40
% in 1920, Change preposition
at 40
after
20 years it was 60%. Correct word choice
and after
Then
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this
device`s use Linking Words
percentage
grew Use synonyms
up
70% Change preposition
by
untill
1960, but Correct your spelling
until
since
1960 to 1980 decreased to approximately 65%. After Change preposition
from
that
we can see increase Add a comma
that,
dynamics
again Change preposition
in dynamics
untill
2019 and Correct your spelling
until
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percentage
grew up from 65 to 75.
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the percentage
Secondly
, the vacuum cleaner shows Linking Words
steady
increase dynamic from 1920 to 2000, Correct article usage
a steady
respectivly
the use Correct your spelling
respectively
percentage
rose from 30 to 100 and Use synonyms
then
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remaining
stable. The Wrong verb form
remained
time
for using these Use synonyms
devices
started Use synonyms
50
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at 50
hours
per week in 1920Use synonyms
,
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apply
after
40 years decreased Correct word choice
and after
20
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by 20
hours
. After Use synonyms
that
the Add a comma
that,
time
spent slightly decreased again and Use synonyms
drop
off Wrong verb form
dropped
10
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by 10
hours
per week end of the period.Use synonyms
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