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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measure can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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In the past thirty years
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cars ownerships
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car ownership
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have
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has
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incresed
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increased
 to the max , leading to some say big
traffic
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jam
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jams
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.I firmly believe that the increasing numbers of
cars
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 in
a small or big regions
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small or big regions
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 can have a lot of issues .
Firstly
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, some areas are not designed to be able to have big capacity .
Secondly
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, with today's modern
life
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 many
cars
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 are designed to be
hybird
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hybrid
hybrids
, a type of car where it can use electricity and gas .
Thirdly
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,
traffic
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have
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 been related to how many
cars
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 you own , some
civilian
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 think the more
cars
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 you own the more likely
traffic
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 you will cause.
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, there was a study back in 2003 on how the more
cars
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 you own can be related.
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, governments are starting to put a fine on the
amount
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 of
cars
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 you own
such
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 as
Japan
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 ,
this
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,
have
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showed
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 a huge difference in
traffic
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 .Some believe the fine
have
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 helped with restricting the
traffic
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 and limiting it.
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,
if
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apply
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every government start to have a law on how many
cars
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a
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apply
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one can own or redesign roads or even different working hours.
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 , I think that governments should start to use
Socialmedia
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social media
in
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as
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 a way of showing awareness towards
it's
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 people.In conclusion, the increasing
numbers
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number
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 of
cars
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 can have big problems in any type of region leading to multiple
traffics
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traffic
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 and problems
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 , governments should start by applying
law
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a law
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 or a fine to help with decreasing the number of
traffic
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.

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structure
Work on organizing your essay in a clearer structure, such as introducing a problem, discussing its impact, and proposing solutions in separate paragraphs.
content depth
Expand on each point with more detailed explanations and examples to better illustrate your arguments.
cohesion
Try to clearly distinguish between each point and create smooth transitions between ideas to improve the logical flow of your essay.
task adherence
You have included both the problems caused by increased car ownership and potential government solutions, which aligns well with the task requirements.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are present and attempt to frame and summarize your argument, which helps structure the essay.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented surge
  • congestion
  • peak hours
  • pollution
  • infrastructure
  • exacerbate
  • mitigate
  • affordable public transportation
  • congestion charges
  • densely populated areas
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • promoting cycling
  • healthier lifestyle
  • incentivize
  • electric cars
  • carpooling
  • tax breaks
  • subsidies
  • priority lanes
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