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The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major British airports between 1998 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given table depicts a comparison between the three main airports in the UK and the number of passengers per million who used them from 1998 to 2003.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that eventually, the number of
travelers
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 at three
centers
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 in the UK increased remarkably over the period in question. Looking at the details regarding Gatwick, the leading British airport with the most
travelers
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 in 1998, formed 36.5, after which it rose and hit 69.3, remaining the highest figure in 2003. The second one was Heathrow;
additionally
, it reported 27.2 in 2007, but the upward trend continued until 2000 when it recorded 48.2, which became the highest among the others in that year.
This
 was followed by a slight downfall until 2002 and reported 33.2, after which it recovered to 45.6 by the end of the period, remaining the second most-used airport in 2003.
In contrast
, the Stansted Center in 1998 had a third place with only 17.3 million passengers, but after a
while
, the figure rocketed significantly until 2001 it almost tripled, recording 43.3 by 2001.
However
, the statistics remained stable in the
last
 3 years, from 2001 to 2003.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity in expressing the main ideas. While your overview is clear, the transitions and comparisons need a little more clarity. Use connector words to enhance legibility.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented. Including a clearer logical progression between paragraphs will improve coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to directly and consistently compare the data within similar lines for smoother task achievement.
task achievement
Although you included specific data, the analysis sometimes lacks clarity, leading to slight confusion. Make sure examples support the information provided.
task achievement
The essay overall provides a good summary of the information with evident knowledge of data reporting in tasks.
coherence cohesion
Main points are acknowledged, and trends are highlighted, demonstrating a solid understanding.
coherence cohesion
You effectively include a conclusion that encapsulates the main trends seen in the data.

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