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The table illustrates the number of mobile phones and personal computers.

The table illustrates the number of mobile phones and personal computers.
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The table illustrates the
number
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 of mobile
phones
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 and personal
computers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in six different countries in 2003.
Overall
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, Iceland had the highest
number
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 of mobile
phones
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 and personal
computers
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 per 1,000
people
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,
whereas
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 Chile had the lowest in both categories. A clear trend is observed where countries with a high
number
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 of mobile
phones
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 tend to have a high
number
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 of personal
computers
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 as well. Iceland ranked the highest in mobile phone ownership, with 900
phones
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 per 1,000
people
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, followed by Zealand, which had 550. France and Malaysia had moderate figures, with 200 and 250
phones
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 per 1,000
people
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, respectively.
In contrast
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, Chile recorded the lowest figure at just 50
phones
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 per 1,000
people
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. For personal
computers
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, San Marino had the second-highest
number
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, at 720 per 1,000
people
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, despite having only 100 mobile
phones
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. Iceland came
next,
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with 400
computers
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 per 1,000
people
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. France and Zealand had similar figures, at 300 and 350
computers
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 per 1,000
people
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, respectively. Meanwhile, Chile and Malaysia shared the lowest figure of 100
computers
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 per 1,000
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phones, computers, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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