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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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With the growing population, the need for new
food
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 sources has increased. One suggestion is to use
insects
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 as a
food
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 source.
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, some people argue that eating
insects
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 can negatively influence our health and environment.
This
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insects
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.  Eating
insects
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 has some significant advantages.
First,
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source of vitamins and protein can be found in
insects
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, so they are considered to be a good source of
nutritions
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, contributing to fostering people's health.
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, they are less expensive to farm compared to other animals like cows and chickens, making them a more sustainable option for
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, especially in areas where resources are limited.
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,
insects
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 can help
in reducing
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they
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the
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 waste, as
insects
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 feed on organic matter, and
are
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 not
required
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 to grow 
On the other hand
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, there are drawbacks to eating
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. One of them is that
insects
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 can carry toxins or diseases if they are not cleaned or cooked properly, contributing to infection with serious diseases.
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, overharvesting
insects
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 might lead to damage to our environment, as
insects
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 play a significant role in pollination and the ecosystem.
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, there may be a rejection of society members towards eating
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, making it difficult to introduce them as
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food
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 option.  In conclusion, eating
insects
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 has both pros and cons.
While
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 they are sustainable and nutritious
food
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 sources, concerns about health, environment, and cultural acceptance remain challenges. With proper farming approaches and education,
insects
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 could be a valuable addition to the global
food
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 supply chain

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task achievement
While the response covers both the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects, it could include more specific examples to strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
Overall structure is clear, but some ideas could be more developed for better coherence. Ensure that each point is detailed enough to provide clear comprehension.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively summarize the argument.
complete response
The essay covers the task response by discussing both pros and cons of eating insects.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food scarcity
  • edible insects
  • nutritional benefits
  • cultural barriers
  • psychological barriers
  • mainstream food source
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmentally sustainable
  • economic benefits
  • local farmers
  • health safety
  • allergies
  • pesticides
  • pollutants
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • regulations
  • hygiene
  • unforeseen consequences
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