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Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/ unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntarylunpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntarylunpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntarylunpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir/Madam, Hope
this
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 email finds you well. I am writing to you regarding an opportunity for part-time voluntary work at
museum
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a museum
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 that happens to be located right near my home. I would like to express interest in
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 opportunity for various
reason
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reasons
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.
Firstly
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 I would like to gain
expirience
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experience
 in
environment
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the environment
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such
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 as
museum
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a museum
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, I
belive
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believe
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 that working in
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 kind of place will help me to learn more about famous
artist
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artists
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 and other important
history
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historical
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 figures.
Second
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The second
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 reason why it would be my passion,
for
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is for
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 organization and
bookeeping
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bookkeeping
 since I enjoy tracking data and analyzing to keep everything up to date.
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Lastly
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 it would help me complete voluntary hours that my University requires for graduation. Qualities that I
belive
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believe
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 might be
usfull
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useful
 for
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 work
is
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are
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ability
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the ability
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 to communicate with people and solve problems if they
occure
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occur
.
More over
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Moreover
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, I made multiple
project
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projects
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 for school about
masterpices
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masterpieces
 at your establishment and
aware
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am aware
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about
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of
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history
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the history
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 behind most of them.
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 ability can be
usful
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useful
 in holding small lectures and
guide
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guiding
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 people if they have questions about the artists. I am available to start
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possition
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position
 immediately. During the week my availability is Monday to Friday from 9-5 since I attend
evening
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an evening
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 University
programm
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program
. Hope to hear back from you soon. Faithfully yours, Sofiia Lyefi

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suitable writing tone
Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. Although the tone is generally suitable, a more formal phrase in the closing (e.g., 'Yours faithfully' instead of 'Faithfully yours') could enhance professionalism.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph covers a single idea clearly. For instance, consider separating the paragraph describing your skills from the paragraph discussing availability.
general advice
Always proofread your letter to correct small grammatical errors, such as 'expirience' instead of 'experience', 'organisation' instead of 'organization', 'usfull' instead of 'useful'.
complete response
You effectively explained your reasons for wanting to volunteer at the museum, covering both personal interests and university requirements.
logical structure
Your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, contributing to a logical structure and good coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteering experience
  • cultural heritage
  • artifacts
  • exhibitions
  • cataloging
  • event coordination
  • public engagement
  • communication skills
  • multilingual abilities
  • availability schedule
  • historical knowledge
  • art appreciation
  • patience and enthusiasm
  • customer service skills
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