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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods , rice , wheat and maize , by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods , rice , wheat and maize , by people in four different countries.
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The present table compares data about the
consumption
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 of three basic foods namely
rice
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,
wheat
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 and
maize
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 in  four various countries.
This
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 data is represented in calories per
person
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 per pay.   
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most people from
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Cambodi
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Cambodia
 prefer to consume
rice
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 more than others
while
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 Egypt experienced the highest
consumption
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 of
wheat
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. 
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category
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the category
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 of
Mexico
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 in
consumption
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 of
maize
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are
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famoused
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famous
.    In detail, 
figures
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the figures
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 of
rice
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I
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in
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Cambodi
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Cambodia
 which was accounted for 1445 per day
for
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per
person
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 calories
while
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 Egypt
also
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 experienced a bit of
consumption
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rice
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 than
Cambodi
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 with about 501.
In addition
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,
Mexico
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 owned 57 than
higher
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apply
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Poland by 38 per
person
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 per day calory.    Coming to the product of
wheat
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more
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is more
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 consumed by Egyptians compared to
Polands
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Poland
 with 1,09 and 865 respectively.
In contrast
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, 
Mexico
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 stood at 275 in
category
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 of
wheat
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 than higher
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Cambodi
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Cambodia
Cambodian
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person
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people
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 with
by
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257.   
According to
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 the
consumption
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 data of
maize
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 which
as
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has
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 a
leader
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leading
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 position in
Mexico
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 inhabitants about 1083 . Meanwhile, 
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Cambodi
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Cambodia
 and Egypt were 103 and 578 per
person
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 per day calories respectively.  Intestinal,
maize
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product
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products
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 in Poland's rate
consumption
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 accounted for zero
point
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points
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,so people did not eat
maize
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 in Poland.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, rice, wheat, maize, person, cambodi, mexico with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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