Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantagesDiscuss both views and give your opinion

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people
love debating about
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sport
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as a way to advertise themselves. fundamentally I don'
t
know how sports
be
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developement
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develop
consiously without
sponsor
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. but
this
essay will discuss both
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perspectives
.
firstly
, some
people
believe that it is an effective way to companies sponsor
sport star
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sports stars
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as
advertisement
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advertisements
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. because
many
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of
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case
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, it is to give pleasure
people
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to people
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pro's
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game. it isn'
t
amaturer's
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amateur's
. they are getting numerous
benefit's
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for their games. how they
good
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play in
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their
game is
their's
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their
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competitiness
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competitiveness
.
their's
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powerful competition brings
entertaining
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for us.
this
pleasure brings
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a sens
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sens
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of
needs
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. it makes
observating
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observing
observation
their
advertisement
and
effectniess
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effeteness
effectless
of advertising. I
assue
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assume
assure
this
makes good cycle in economical society. and it is a most
healty
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healthy
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and effectivest
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effectivest
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effectiveness
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effectively
of advantages in
advertisement
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the advertisement
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.
for
instance
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we can see that famous
sport
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star
freequantly
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frequently
have
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showend
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showed
shown
many
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on many
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of
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channels. many kids practice very hard. because they want to be
a
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apply
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sports
hero
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. it helps children
having
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a
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great
habbits
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habits
and
very
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activity
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. on the one hand, there are some
people
opposing
this
opinion. they argue that it makes
sportmenship
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sportsmanship
unenocent. sometimes players
out
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of roles because they are too
much
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apply
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competivity
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competitive
.
such
as abuse of medication,
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and treathen
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treathen
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threaten
treatment
to
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of
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race's result.
this
isn'
t
a
sportmen
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sportsmen
sportsman
ship. but they can'
t
be overcome easily
to
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by
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these bad suggestions.
their's
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outcome makes
tremedous
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tremendous
money.
for
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example in
korea
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very famous swimming star
arrested
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for meditation
problem's
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problems
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in few
year's
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years
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ago. he
told
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that he'd
recieved
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received
for many
period
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to various of pressure. it caused him to
medication
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problem
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problems
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. and some
people
say that we need a
sport
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spirit
enocent
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innocent
. I agree but It
isn'
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t
easily look
to
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too
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constant. in conclusion,
competitives
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competitors
keeps
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keep
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on
entertain
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entertaining
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and
consious
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conscious
. I believe that an
advertisement
will keep going. but it reserves the spirit by diverse
method
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methods
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. because we love to watch sports
game
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games
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.
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