The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The line graph provides

the

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information about one

peson

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person

consumes

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consuming

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three speads every

day

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betwen

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between

1981 and 2007 in a country.

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, both

margarine

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consumption

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and

butter

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consumption

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were

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apply

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decreased,

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and we

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witnessed an increase in

low fat

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and reduced

spreads

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spread

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consumption

comsumption

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consumption

In 1981,

margarine

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consumption

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and

butter

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consumption

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were

approximate

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100

grams

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and 140

grams

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respectively,

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after the next five

year

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years

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, there was a decrease in

margarine

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consumption

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grams

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per

day

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, and

margarine

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consumption

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rose slightly to 100

grams

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per

day

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again in 1991. And the

consumption

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maintained the same

levat

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level

until 1996 and

then

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collapsed considerably to 40

grams

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in 2007.

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the

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apply

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butter

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consumption

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collapsed rapidly

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2007 In 1996, low fat and reduced spreads

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consumption

comsumption

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consumption

were at 10

grams

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however

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it saw

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sharp increase to 80

grams

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per

day

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and

then

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the

consumption

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reduced slowly

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grams

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but still higher than

margarine

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consumption

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and

butter

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consumption

consumptioin

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consumption

in 2007

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words day, margarine, consumption, butter, grams with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "collapsed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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