Some people think that adverts control what we purchase, while others think they are useful sources of information on products.

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of people believe that
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advertisements
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can manipulate what we are buying, meanwhile
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others
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believe that advertisement is
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source of
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about the product. Below we will discuss both of
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views,including my own opinion. On the one hand,adverts have
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control over the customers.
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, a new company in
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industry Rhode by Hailey Bieber. Over
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year,her marketing
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into a global influence
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the female part of society.
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her
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routine was criticized by many experts. But as mentioned earlier,her marketing team
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a great step
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all
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the new
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techniques. She started associating her brand with
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. She had a deal with
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the company
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of
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shop
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donuts
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. It consisted
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the following linked
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donut with skin glowing,which was
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step because her brand was in every social media space.
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,advertising is
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source of
information
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informs about the multiple factors ,
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as quality, prices,what
product
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products
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involve
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,
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and where
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and how it produced.As an example,smartphones have a special ability to hear what we are talking about, and highlight words . By
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function, cell
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phones
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create
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own algorithm that could attract
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,and recommend
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apply
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product
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products
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that people would interested in.You click
into
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the website and read
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information
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the information
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that you want to know. In conclusion ,both statements have their own advantages and disadvantages.
Although
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they can influence our mind by many factors,and manipulate our decisions. But
also
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give us valuable
information
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that could help us to stay informed and make our lives more easier
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuasive techniques
  • celebrity endorsements
  • catchy slogans
  • emotional appeals
  • materialistic culture
  • competitive pricing
  • consumer demand
  • brand loyalty
  • consumer behavior
  • innovations
  • informed choices
  • misleading claims
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