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The two pie chart provide the main reasons fro choosing a perticular UK university in 1987 and 2007.

The two pie chart provide the main reasons fro choosing a perticular UK university in 1987 and 2007.
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The two given
pie
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 charts illustrate the main reasons for choosing a particular British
University
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 in two different years 1987 and 2007.
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, it is clear from the
pie
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 chart that the major reason for choosing that specific
university
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 was
suitable
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the suitable
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 degree courses in both years. The quality of resources and the location
was
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 the second most prominent reasons for choosing that
university
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 in 1987 and 2007 respectively. According
two
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to
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 the first
pie
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 chart, in 1987, 35% of
students
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choose
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chose
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this
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 British
University
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 because of suitable degree courses,
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 21% of
students
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 selected
this
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 British
University
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 because of the quality of resources.
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, good sports facilities and social activities were the 3rd choice for
students
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, and 19% of
students
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choose
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chose
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this
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university
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 because of that. Meanwhile, only 10% of
students
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 selected
this
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university
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 because it was closer to their parental home.
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 the second
pie
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 chart, in 2007, suitable degree courses
was
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were
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 still the first priority of
students
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 in terms of choosing that
university
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 and it increased slightly. 37% of
students
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 choose that
university
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 because of that. Location was the second most top priority for
students
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, and 22% of
students
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choose
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chose
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this
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 because of that. Only 6% of
students
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 liked that
university
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 because of good sports and social activities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, university, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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