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The pie charts give information about the world’s forests in five different regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about the world’s forests in five different regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustrates
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 the amount of
world
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forest
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 and
timber
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 in five different nations.
Overall
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, the largest
forest
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 in those regions is
Africa
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 with 27 per cent.
Otherwise
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,
timber
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 in
Africa
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 only
production for
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produces
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 9 per cent
over
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of
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 the
forest
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. Meanwhile, Asia
have
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 14% of
greenland
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Greenland
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, eventually having 18%
timber
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 more than their portion of woodland.
In addition
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, the largest production of
Timber
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 is
North
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America
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 at 30% of their 25% timberland. Looking at the
world
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forest
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 chart,
Africa
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 and North
America
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owns
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 nearly 30% of
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forest
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the forest
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 in the
world
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.
While
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, Europe had 18% of
greenland
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Greenland
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 in the
world
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and
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following
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followed
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 by South
America
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who
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which
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 owns 16
portion
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portions
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 of
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the woods
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woods
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wood
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 and Asia with 14%
from
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of
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total
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the total
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forest
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 in the
world
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, making them the least nation
who owns
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world
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forest
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. Moving to the other pie,
Africa
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 who expected to be have the largest production of
timber
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 apparently only had 9%
timber
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 which the lowest nation
who
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that
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output
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outputs
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 logs.
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While
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apply
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, North
America
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has whose
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whose
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the
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 second
of owning
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largest
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forest
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 in the
world
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,
outputing
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outputting
timber
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 at 30%
which
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apply
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overtaking
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overtakes
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 the area of the woods and
making
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makes
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 them the most productive
producting
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producing
timber
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 region .
Similary
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Similarly
 with other
nation
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nations
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,
who
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maximalized their
greenland
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Greenland
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 into timbers until 18-23%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, forest, timber, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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