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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The chart compares what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their degree course.the table compares the salaries of anthropologists in
work
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 after 5 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most
students
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 worked in full-time
work
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,
whereas
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 the most highly paid type of
work
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 was government sector. As the chart shows, graduates worked in full-time
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 more, than in part-time
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, 52% and 15%, respectively.
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,
students
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 who worked at full-time postgrad study were the same as
students
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 who did not know where to
work
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, both with 8% figure.
Students
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 who did not
work
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 were more than graduates who worked at part-time jobs and at postgrad study. 12% and 5%, respectively. As the table shows, starting with freelance consultants. Freelance consultants had 4 types of salaries. The most highly paid was $100.000+ were the same with $75.000-99.999. Both figures were 40%.
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workers
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 who got $50.000-74.999 were more than
workers
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 who got $25.000-49.999, 15% and 5% respectively. The next
work
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 was in the government sector. Most employees got a salary of $100.000+,
whereas
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 the
last
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 one was $25.000-49.999, 50% and 5%. The
workers
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 who got a salary of $75.000 were more than those who got $50.000-74.999, 30% and 15%, respectively. The next type of employment was privacy companies. The
workers
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 who paid $50.000-74,999 had the most
workers
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 with a 35% figure
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 and the least one worker who paid $25.000-49.999 with a 10% figure. Employers who paid $100.000+ were more than those who got a salary of $75.000-99.999, 30% and 25%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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