The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
compare
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the amount of shops closed and the amount of shops opened in the country over a period of 7 years.
It is clear that
the
number
of
shop
opening
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openings
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was higher than the
number
of
shop
closures
at
first,
but it
lower
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was lower
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than
number
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a number
the number
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of
shop
closures
in the end.
Besides
, the
number
of
shop
closures
saw a dramatic decline in 2015. In 2011, the
number
of
shop
opening
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openings
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stood at around 8500, but it experienced a
shrap
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sharp
decrease to 4000 next year.
However
, openings increased to 6200 and had closed by
closures
in 2014. The
number
of
shop
opening
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openings
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dropped to 4000 in 2015 and fell consistently.
Finally
reaching 3000 by 2018. The figure
of
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closures
fluctuate between 6000 and 7000 from 2011 to 2014.
On the other hand
, the line graph has slumped about 600 in 2015,
then
rose rapidly to 5000 next year. Between 2016 and 2018, the
number
of
shop
closures
remainde
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remained
stable at just over 5000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shop, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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