In some countries it is common for young people to leave home and live on their own or with friends when they finish school. Some people think this is a good idea for young people. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that
people
have to leave
thier
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their
home
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.
While
it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
that teenagers have to leave
thier
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their
home and live alone or with others, there is
also
an argument
thatopposes
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that opposes
it. In my opinion, I consider that it it's good
foor
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for
young
people
to live
thier
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their
own life.
To begin
with, it is teaching them how they can be
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responsible
.
in other words
, they shop, buy,
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there
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own things without the help of their parents
In addition
, time
manegment
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management
.
For example
, they will start to manage their time like when should they sleep or when should they be awake
becouse
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because
of
thier oppointment
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their appointments
, school and work. There was
a
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research established in 1995 in the United Kingdom and it says that
people
who live alone can get to their work or their meetings earlier than
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those who
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live with their families. Another point to consider, can find
thier
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their
hobbies much easier when they are by themselves. it is
also
possible to say that when you're alone you understand yourself and you might somehow
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find
you
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your
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secret hobbies more than when you live with your family.
For instance
, I thought
i
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I
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couldn't cock until
i
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I
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lived alone in a far village with no
resturants
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restaurants
just a small supermarket to shop from it. so
i
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I
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was forced to cock but surprisingly,
i
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I
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was good after that
i
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I
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started to rely more on myself and not
ordering
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junk foods. In conclusion, despite
people
having different views,
i
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believe that it is a
wounderful
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wonderful
step for young
people
to take.
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