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Some people believe that a significant difference between a parents age and their child's age is a good thing. Do you think the advantages of a significant age gap outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #difference #parents #age #child #gap
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Nowadays, it
is become
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 an
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argument
 that
parents
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age
 can affect the banded between them and their children.
While
 it
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from
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 some people that a significant gap is better,
while
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thing
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 is not.
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easy
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illustrate
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both
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 and I will give my opinion. On the one hand, if the
parents
 have a totally different
age
 between them and their kids that for sure would have advantages
such
 as, they would have enough knowledge to teach them
children
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, children,
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 much better and
also
 provide them with
neccessary
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necessary
 skills which they have
as a result
 of
them
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the
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 life
experince
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experience
.
However
, there are
also
 some disadvantages down to the different generation may affect the
relasionship
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relationship
 and make it
diffecult
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difficult
 for
parents
 to understand the way of thinking for
them
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the
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 kids.
On the other hand
, having tiny gaps would be much better, because the
parents
 will be from the same generation, which
mean
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 they can understand what is going on the society and that
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of course
 will change the way
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them
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they
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behavirour
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behave
 with
them
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their
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 children.
In addition
, the majority of young members if they have a problem prefer to talk to
them
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their
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 friends more than
them
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their
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parents
, because they feel
unconfortable
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uncomfortable
 and
them
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their
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parents
 will not understand them well, so having a tiny
different
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difference
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on
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 the
age
 will
reduse
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reduce
this
 issue and make the coummucation much easier .  
To sum up
, despite people having different views, in my
opinion
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 I consider that the advantages of a significant
age
 gap outweigh the disadvantages .
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • generational differences
  • emotional intelligence
  • financial stability
  • life experience
  • extracurricular activities
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