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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the teaching
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 represented by instructors to three levels of study in four regions in 2001.
Overall
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, it is evident from the chart that the USA had the highest rate of teaching
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 among the other nations in all grades of study.
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, time spent for the upper secondary phase constituted the major portion in all countries except Ireland which dedicated more
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 to the lower secondary. Meanwhile, the figure was the same for primary schools in all of them except the USA.
According to
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 the chart, instructing upper secondary took up a significant proportion in almost all countries with approximately 1100
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 of teaching in the USA, almost 1000 in Spain, and under 800 in Japan and Ireland.
In contrast
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, the amount of time expenses for primary entries was the lowest in all nations at just over 800 in the US, and exactly at 600 for the others relatively.
Moreover
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, there was a stage, namely lower secondary which had the major
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 expenditure in Ireland with 800
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.
Thus
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, the figure for
this
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 was more than 1000 in the US and
on the other hand
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 the same in Japan and Spain at 600 again.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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