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When I was a child, I was walking with my

father

in his industrial work

while

he was doing his duty as an operator, I saw multiple big shiny towers ahead of us

produsing

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producing

loud noises, I said “

Father

, what is that?

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that a candy factory?!” asking my

father

, my

father

responded with a big laugh “No son, it is crude oil distillation unit!”.

then

years

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after

years

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, I was always asking my

father

about the name of each individual unit and tower,

then

I went deeply through asking my

father

the functions of

these unit

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, and

its

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final product,

recieving

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receiving

and absorbing knowledge from him, I

fell

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in love with Chemical Engineering during my childhood. I

toke

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advantage of my

father

’s knowledge, by

transfering

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transferring

transforming

it into an unlimited passion.

Consequently

Chemistry

was my highest grade as a subject

along with

math in high school. I started asking my teachers some simple

question

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, step by step, I went to a higher level by asking them

with

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high level

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questions, building and sharpening my math and

chemistry

skills was not enough

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this

method for me, so

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bought a

valuble

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valuable

book talking about the advanced

chemistry

with

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another book talking about advanced math,

this

method made me more professional that my high school exams became extremely easy for me and allowed to me to graduate from high school with a very high GPA in the science subjects. Entering the major of Chemical engineering is the perfect choice for me because of its beautiful fields which provide me

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advanced information to sharpen my knowledge and skills deriving me so much benefit

mastering

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chemistry

and building my

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brain.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

283 words

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