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Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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lot
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 of advantages that
advancement
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the advancement
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 of science has brought in the field of farming. Regardless, it always does not bring benefits to the society and country. With the development of new machines,
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and infrastuctures
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infrastuctures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
, many of these artificial equipment are starting to replace the work of
the
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humans.
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, they are left with no jobs.
whan
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When
 a machine can do a job of 50 people, companies would not even bother hiring the farmers. Many of the
job
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 of the farmers will be replaced by the modern
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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.
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, the cost of goods will
skyrocate
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skyrocket
 because it is quite expensive to build
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this
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these
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 machines. And the government has to collect from the locals to be able to afford these
equipments
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equipment
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. There is no doubt that the
expandment
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expansion
 of knowledge horizon in farming has dramatically changed the techniques of production of goods. With
the
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global warming, it
id
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is
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 hard to predict the suitability of soil and land with the goods.
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, it has been made easy
from
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for
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the
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scientific
researches
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research
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 to find out. Even though, new
researches
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research
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have
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has
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 made a huge impact in farming and
have
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has
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 brought major changes from which everyone has
bren
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been
 benefitted. I still believe that it has affected farmers in many ways especially
on
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in
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 financial aspects as it has taken their
job
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jobs
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 away from them. So, I oppose the view that scientific achievements in farming always
has
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it
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 benefits.
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