The graphs below show the average retirement age for men and women in 2004 and 2008 in six different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below displays the standard
retirement
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age
for males and females in 2004 and 2008 in six different countries.
Overview, the highest average Use synonyms
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for males in 2004 was in Sweden Use synonyms
as well as
for females.
In 2008 Sweden still had an elevated average for Linking Words
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in both genders.The second highest country with an average Use synonyms
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age
is the Netherlands. The lowest average Use synonyms
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for quit working was in France.
In 2004 Sweden men and women workers retired at 63 Use synonyms
years
old , and in 2008 the Use synonyms
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increased to 64 Use synonyms
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Moreover
, in 2004 Netherlands male employees retired at the Linking Words
age
of 62 ,and in 2008 the Use synonyms
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slightly grew to 63 Use synonyms
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. The female Netherlands employees used to retire in 2004 at the Use synonyms
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of 61 ,Use synonyms
however
, in 2008 the Linking Words
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average steadily raised to 62 Use synonyms
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old. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, France is considered the lowest average Linking Words
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in comparison with other countries. In 2004 French men and women stopped working by the Use synonyms
age
of 58 and by 2008 the Use synonyms
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continued the same for ladies, but the male increased to 59.Use synonyms
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