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"Is it important for schools to make art a compulsory part of the curriculum? Discuss both views and give your opinion."

There is an ongoing debate on whether
art
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 should be
mandatory
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 subject in
schoold
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school
schools
, with differing opinions on its
imprtance
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importance
. Some people argue that
art
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 is essential,
while
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 others believe that academic subjects
such
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 as mathematics and science should be
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. In my opinion,
although
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art
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 plays a significant role in student development, it should not be
compulsary
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compulsory
 for all
students
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. On one hand,
Art
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 encourages creativity and critical thinking which are significant skills to develop
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an
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 early age. Developing
such
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 skills can benefit them in their
career's future
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 in technology or science.
Moreover
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,
art
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 enhances emotional intelligence and
make
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makes
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 a space for them to express themselves freely as it
promotres
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promotes
 mental health.
On the other hand
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, people argue that
students
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 should focus on core subjects like mathematics and science in order to prepare them for the job market.
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, not all
students
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 have
interest
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 in
art
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 which might result in disengagement during
art
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 classes.
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, making it mandatory would frustrate
students
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 and burden them to
preform
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perform
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 well. So I believe it should be an elective class for
students
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 to enjoy and develop their talents
withou
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without
 bringing the pressure of
preformance
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performance
.
To sum up
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,
art
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 is a crucial aspect of life but I think it should not be
compulsary
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compulsory
 for all
students
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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