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The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The provided table represents the comparison of New Zealand's
population
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 based on their age in 2011 and 2012.
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, it can be seen that
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 the group of 15-39-year-olds was the most, it showed a decrease in 2012.
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, when all ages were added, the
population
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 of New Zealand increased marginally. Looking in more detail, even though the quantity of society aged 65 and over rose from 573.946
people
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 in 2011 to 596.903
people
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 in 2012, recording the highest growth,
this
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 figure had the lowest portion of the
population
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. During the same period, the quantity of children under fifteen was the second smallest portion of the four other categories, despite it
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 a decline of 0,2% at 896.364. The remaining two categories had the majority of the total residents, with more than one million
people
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. Remaining dominant in 2011 with 1.577.256, the portion of
people
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 aged 15-39 went down to 0.2% in 2012,
while
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 that of
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 aged 40-64 grew to 0.6%.
This
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 growth
similar
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with
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 the total
population
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in
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of
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 all ages, growing by 29.015
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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