Some sports are considered extremely dangerous, but many people still like them. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers

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more and more common for
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dangerous
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wich
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consider to include a huge
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of risks for those
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essay will down to the reasons for
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issue and recommend some suggestions to reduce the amount of risks. To
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with the idea that these days the number of
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who
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in dangerous
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had
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more than before.
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those
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can cause a lot of
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,
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still
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it
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, and that would
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for so many reasons
such
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as: those
sports
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bring
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the
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feeling of joy and
also
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give them an
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to have an
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in
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lives.
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, by doing those
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the amount of dopamine in
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blood, which
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, will slightly
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mention some suggestions, which
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can do, to avoid
this
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issue. Starting from the idea that
people
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, who want to do those
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sport
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should apply
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an official trainer about the
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which they consider
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because the trainer will teach them the correct ways of doing the
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, so the amount of
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like mountaineering require
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official clothes which
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must
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wear, but
on the other
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hand
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sometimes they ignore
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problem the government must
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that. In conclusion,
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people
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views. In my
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I consider that doing dangerous
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need to know all the ways of
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risk before
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do it.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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