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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The charts present the general number of times in a period for tourists from Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian spend their free time activities whilst on holiday in Greece.
Overall
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, Reading a book is the most loving activity for Chinese and American guests.
while
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 staying out on the coast is
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people from Turkey and Brazil favourite.
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, visiting places had fewer fans for all the countries. Chinese visitors seem like really love to read a book, in fact, they can spend 8
hours
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 a
day
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 on it.
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 is a massive number of other activities and countries, and
on the other hand
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, they are not into going to the other places. American visitors love to read books followed by going to the beach, where they can spend 5
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 and 4
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, respectively.
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, They
also
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 love to explore other places like Turkish guests for 3
hours
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 a
day
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. The favourite activity for Turkish visitors is staying up at the oceanfront and can spend 5
hours
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.
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, They have the same number as Brazilian tourists for reading a book, which is 4
hours
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 a
day
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. The
last
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 is Brazilian, they can run through their time 6
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 a
day
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 to stay on the beach.
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, reading books is their second favourite for 4
hours
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 each
day
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, and the
last
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 is visiting
other area
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 it just 2
hours
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 a
day
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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