The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.

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The table and chart illustrate

about

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the police

budget

in one area of Britain in 2017 and 2018. The table gives information about where the

budget

came from and the charts provide

informatio

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information

about

they

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the

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way the

budget

was allocated.

Overall

police

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the police

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budget

was in 2018 higher than

2017

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for all sources

such

as national government and local taxes, other sources.

While

the

budget

distributed to buildings and transport

was remained

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in 2017 and 2018 It was clearly seen from the table

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that, national

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national

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the national

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government contributed to the

budget

accounted

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and accounted

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for the largest amount with 175.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018. The local taxes in 2017 and 2018

was

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91.2m and 102.3m respectively. Other sources

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the lowest amount with 38m and 38.5m in 2017 and 2018 respectively.

While

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the percentage of the

budget

distributed to salaires was the largest figure in 2017 and 2018 at 75% and 69% respectively. Building and transport stayed the same proportion in 2017 and 2018,

while

the figures

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technology in 2018

was

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were

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higher than the figure in 2017

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

175 words

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