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The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about the difference in worldwide
food
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 and
oil
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 prices from 2000 to 2011. The data are given two categories which are
food
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price
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 index and average
oil
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price
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that both
oil
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 and
food
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 prices had a similar upward trend from 2000 to around 2008. After that, it dramatically decreased in 2009
then
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 rose sharply from 2009 to 2011.
Moreover
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, the correlation between them is 93.6 per cent.
To begin
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 with the average
oil
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price
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, the average
oil
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price
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 started from around 40
dollars
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 per
barrel
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 in 2000
then
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 gradually increased to about 130
dollars
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 per
barrel
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 in 2006 and slightly decreased in 2007. After that, there was
a
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continued growth and reached its peak at 130
dollars
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 per
barrel
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 in 2008 before dropping to approximately 50
dollars
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 per
barrel
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 in 2009 and climbing progressively to 100
dollars
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 per
barrel
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 2011. Moving on to the
food
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price
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 index, the
food
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price
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 index slowly increased from 90 points in 2000 to 220 points in 2008
then
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 dropped to 140 points in 2009 and showed an upward trend between 2009 and 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, oil, price, dollars, barrel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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