In some culture the old people is more valued while in some culture young is more valued. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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their own values on the basis of the culture.
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there are
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about
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age group should be more respected as some other opine that order way would be more appreciated. From my
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, I agree with the former viewpoint because they thoughts
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angry that yellow
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as they are the
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who taught us to be
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successful
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in our lives.
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my parents are the
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who hold my hand to school so that I can learn new things. Success. Thought or not to be in the line where
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why some
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perspective.
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order propound young
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should be respected as they are the future of our expectations.
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of youth about
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development reconization.
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both
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the debate
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that both views have their own
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induction but I completely in time towards the opinion that old
people
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should be respected more.

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