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WT2: Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome the stress of everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays , It is a debate among psychologists that doing nothing assists in escaping from
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daily worries. I totally agree with
this
 idea because since your brain is not full of problems of the
day
, you
also
 turn into a tender personality of
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society and feel more relaxed and full of energy. First and foremost ,
brain
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 is the organ that draws not only positive but
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also
 negative aspects of life. In order to feel
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at ease, it is crucial to
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 a break
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it
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for some hours.
Otherwise
, being anxious all
day
 might bring about social problems with not only family members but
also
 with friends and relatives.
For instance
 , in China citizens are allowed to not
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do anything for some hours to create a positive relationship with other people by becoming peaceful individuals.
Secondly
, unless people were given a half break , they would not feel refreshed. Given them a break, they are more likely to do their work with
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high positivity and relaxation in the absence of stress.
Thus
, the outcome of the work seems to be satisfying and promoting.
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 proved that in Japan employees take a break for
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half of the
day
 to get ready for the next duty
day
 with more inspiration and positivity. In conclusion,
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 strongly agree that workers should be free from
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work for
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half of the
day
 as the brains are going to empty the problems
as a result
 of which
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 sense of refreshment
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happens without feeling anxious and
stressful
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 for the whole
day
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