Some doctors show it is important for the old people to have regular exercise. However, some old people cannot get enough exercise. Why do you think this happens? How can old people be encouraged to exercise regularly?
Some doctors
advice
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advise
the
old Correct article usage
apply
people
to do exericse
regularly because of its importance. Correct your spelling
exercise
However
, some old people
cannot get enough excercise
. Correct your spelling
exercise
While
this
trend happens for several reasons, old people
can be encouraged to do regular excercise
Correct your spelling
exercise
for
various ways.
On the one hand, old Change preposition
in
people
do not do excercise
often for several reasons. One reason is that they have Correct your spelling
exercise
a
difficulty Correct article usage
apply
to travel
to sports Change the verb form
travelling
centers
. When Change the spelling
centres
people
reach to certain ages
, their body's function will get worse, they can not walk quickly like young Fix the agreement mistake
age
people
. Some the
elders need Change preposition
of the
others'help
to go Correct your spelling
others help
to
somewhere. Remove the preposition
apply
This
becomes an an
Remove the redundancy
apply
obtackle
to them to access the facilities for old Correct your spelling
obstacle
people
. Additionally
, they can do
not know how to Unnecessary verb
apply
use
properly the equipments
. Take my grandfather Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
for example
, my father bought a massage chair for him, but he doesn't use
often
because there Correct pronoun usage
it often
is
some functions which make him confused to Change the verb form
are
use
.
Correct pronoun usage
use it
On the other hand
, the elders can be encouraged to exercise regularly for
several ways. Change preposition
in
Firstly
, the local people
should spend money to buy some equipments
which is easy to Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
use
for old people
in the neighbourhood . The old people
can walk there in the morning and do excercise
there. Correct your spelling
exercise
exercises
Secondly
, the head of local
should have free seminars for old Correct article usage
the local
people
to educate them about the benefits of doing excercise
regularly. Correct your spelling
exercise
By
Change preposition
In
this
way, old people
can understand that the
risky diseases can be avoided Correct article usage
apply
such
as diebetes
, Correct your spelling
diabetes
obeysity
and heart attaches.
In conclusion, it is crucial for the old to have a regular Correct your spelling
obesity
Correct your spelling
exercise
excercise
, Correct your spelling
exercise
however
old Add the comma(s)
however,
people
can not get enough Correct your spelling
exercise
excercise
because of Correct your spelling
exercise
difficulty
in travelling or using the Correct article usage
the difficulty
equipments
, there are several ways to encourage them to do Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
Correct your spelling
exercise
excercise
oftenCorrect your spelling
exercise
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