The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
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The charts illustrate the local government expenditure in two
years
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, 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, at
the
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first glance,
while
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education
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the education
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sector
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had the largest amounts of expenditure in 2010 and 2015, culture, leisure and other segments
were
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contained the lowest sectors of expenditure. It is evident that, in 2010,
although
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the percentage of
education
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the education
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sector
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was 24%, it decreased by 3%, reaching 21% in 2015.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
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the walfare
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walfare
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welfare
sector
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increased by 5%, reaching 13%
at the end
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of the
priode
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period
. The
expendture
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expenditure
of
healthcare
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the healthcare
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sector
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remained approximately stable during these two
years
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.
Conversely
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,
although
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the
expendture
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expenditure
of
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on
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pensions
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the pensions
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sector
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remained at 19% in both
years
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,
internet
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the internet
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on
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in
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borrowing
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the borrowing
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sector
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planged
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plunged
planned
twice, from 5% to 10%.
Moreover
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, two sectors including, transport, culture and leisure, decreased from 5 per cent to 2
percent
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per cent
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in 2015. It is noticeable that the
expendture
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expenditure
of
other
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the other
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sector
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sectors
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experienced no
changed
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during these
years
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and contained 1% of
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the totall
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totall
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total
percentages.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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