The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph provides the number of international

applicants

to the universities of one

Europeran

Correct your spelling

European

country from 2004 to 2008.

Overall

, China and the USA become the two

country

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countries

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with

highest

Correct article usage

the highest

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applicants

Correct quantifier usage

number of applicants

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over the

years

while

Japan and Russia become the least.

Applicants

from China

has

Correct subject-verb agreement

have

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decrease

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decreased

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throughout the

years

. From over 25000

applicants

in 2004

then

significantly

decrease

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decreased

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until

reach

Wrong verb form

reached

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15000

applicants

in 2008.

This

trend

also

happened to the

applicants

from Russia. Starting with less than 5000 in 2004 and steadily maintain the number

belo

Correct your spelling

below

5000 in 2005 until 2008.

On the other hand

, the

student

Correct quantifier usage

number of student

show examples

applicants

from the USA

increase

Wrong verb form

has increased

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rapidly over the

years

. Starting around 14000 people in 2004

then

started to rise gradually until reaching

Correct pronoun usage

its

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peaks

Correct subject-verb agreement

peak

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with over 25000

applicants

in 2008.

Similarly

, Japanese

applicants

also

rose from

aproximately 6000

Correct your spelling

approximately 6,000

individuals in 2004 and remained constant over the

years

before

reach

Change the verb form

reaching

show examples

1000

applicants

in 2008.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

151 words

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