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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of the
population
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 living in
cities
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020, and forecasts for 2030 and 2040. In the first half of the period, from 1970 to 1990, all four countries had their
population
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 living in the
cities
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for
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lower than 50%. In 1970,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 stood as the highest, accounting for about 32% of its
population
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 living in
cities
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.
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, after a decade,
Malaysia
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 managed to take the first position at
40
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approximately 40
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%, approximately.
This
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 dominance did not
stay
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last
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 long, as
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was able to reclaim its dominance in 1990, with 48% of its
population
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succeeded
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succeeding
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 in living in the
cities
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. In the second half, from 2000 onwards,
Malaysia
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 was able to increase
their
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its
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 percentage until reaching 60%, leaving
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 at 45%,
as well as
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 both
Indonesia
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 and Thailand at 30%. Ten years
from
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after
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 that period, in 2010, the percentage of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 kept on decreasing
until
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to
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 42%, which was slightly lower than
Indonesia
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.
At the end
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 of the period, it is predicted that
Malaysia
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 will stay in the top position, reaching its peak in 2040 at 80%, and it will be followed by
Indonesia
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,
Philippines
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, and Thailand at 62%, 54%, and 50%, respectively. In conclusion, all of the countries were experiencing an increase, except for
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 with its minor decrease from 1990 to 2010.
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, from 2020 onwards, all of them are forecasted to increase without any fluctuation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, philippines, malaysia, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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