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The plans below show a museum in 1957, and the same museum in 2013.

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The given maps depict the main changes which have taken place in the
museum
 area between the
year
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 1957 and 2007. In general, it is crystal clear that there are significant renovations which have been made over the years. The
museum
 building has been expanded into the garden area, resulting in the removal of
trees
, and the
museum
 has created more exhibiting spaces.
To begin
 with, after 50 years, the number of
trees
 has experienced a remarkable reduction in the garden and along the road, with only a few
trees
 remaining in the northwest corner of the gallery. The
museum
, which is located in the eastern
center
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 of the site, has
extented
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extended
 to include a new education
center
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 in the top right corner, special exhibitions on the left side of the
center
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, and a
museum
 shop on the left side of the building. The national history exhibition, which was located in the
center
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 of the facility, has been replaced by the local history room,
while
 both the main hall and the
store-room
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 were replaced by a reception and a cafe. Regarding the rest of the information, in 1957, to the southeast of the site, between the main road and the
museum
 structure, there was plenty of green space with many
trees
. In 2007, all the
trees
 were cut down, and a new car park was constructed
for
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 serve visitors better.
Additionally
, the trail from the main road to the venue has been removed.
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