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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
The line graph below demonstrates the
number
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 of people visiting three different places in a European country between 1987 and 2007. The
number
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 of tourists visiting the mountains and the coast increased,
while
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the lakes plummeted after 2002. In 1987, the figure for
visitors
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 to the coast declined until 1992, from 40
thousand
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 to 35
thousand
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.
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, after that, the
number
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 increased over the next 19 years. In 1987, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the lakes started growing from 10
thousand
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 to 40
thousand
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 until 1997, and
then
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 rapidly rose to 75
thousand
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 tourists in 2002.
Visitors
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 to the mountains started increasing in 1987
30
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thousand
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 and stayed the same from 20
thousand
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 to 7, and the line between 1997 and 2002. In 2002, the
number
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 rose slightly, and in 2007, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 reached 35
thousand
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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