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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.

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The graph provides key information about
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 A and
B
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 favorite subjects
choosing
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 by
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. The
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 is measured in
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number
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a number
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 of
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
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students
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' recorded the maximum figure in
sport
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sports subjects
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subject
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 at 36,
whereas
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school
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 B was at 25
students
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 in craft and drawing.
According to
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 what is shown,
school
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students
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 recorded the lowest
number
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 of
students
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 in craft and drawing, language, social sciences, and sciences in which all of them were less than 10
students
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, in
sport
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subject
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 there was
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sharply increased
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 to 36
students
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. In terms of
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 B, there is variation in
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number
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a number
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 of
students
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 in each studying
materials
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material
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. Science, sport, and social science
registed
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registered
 the lowest
number
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by
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of
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 2, 5 and 10
students
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 respectively.
However
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,
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the langauge
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langauge
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language
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subject
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subjects
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 was
favorable
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favourable
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 by 18
students
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, and the highest
chossing
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choosing
subject
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was
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apply
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craft and drawing by 25
students
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, students, number, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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