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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Sweden showed one of the most significant drops in carbon
emissions
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, especially after 1977.
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 reduction might be because Sweden focused on cleaner energy sources and protecting the environment. The United Kingdom
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 reduced its
emissions
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, but more slowly. Starting at 11 metric tonnes, it decreased to 9 by 2007. Possibly because of actions against pollution and efforts to improve air quality.
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, Italy and Portugal had rising
emissions
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. Italy’s
emissions
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 increased steadily, from 4 to 7 metric tonnes, because the country grew its industries and used more fossil fuels. Portugal,
started
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which started
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 with the lowest
emissions
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 at 1 metric tonne, had
the
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a
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 fast rise and reached almost 5 metric tonnes by 2007.
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 rise represents industrial growth and the need for better environmental actions in these countries.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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