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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
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The pie diagrams illustrate the amount of money invested in different areas by a local government in 2010 and 1015.
Overall
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, the distribution of the between both years is similar as the percentages slightly variated.
Firstly
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, it is shown that pensions and
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 stayed in the same proportion, 19% and 1%, respectively. As
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can be appreciated from the figures, the expenses going to education and defence dropped
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%;
whereas
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 welfare and interest on borrowing grew by 5%.
In addition
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, healthcare insignificantly decreased from 21 to 20 per cent.
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, the expenditure on transport went from 3 to 1%,
as well as
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 culture and leisure
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decreased by half to 1% in 2015.
To sum up
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it is clear that
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 the government maintained their interests
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throughout
 the years because the changes were insignificant.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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