Many people believe that the best place to see the children grow is the city. Others think that the best place is outside the city, in the countryside. Give advantages and disadvantages of both.

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The world is a very different
place
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nowadays. Often some people think the best
place
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for
children
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is the modern
city
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. Other people think that the best
place
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is the countryside. There are many factors affecting
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them .
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and disadvantages of both places . There are many advantages for
children
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to grow up in the
city
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.
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, most modern cities have great schools .
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very
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because learn
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Place
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of the education is very wonderful to study for
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information .
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,
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in
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cities can make friends
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all
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over the
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world .
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that learning skills for anther people . When know about
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new things in life .
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, easy to navigate for going
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everywhere in
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city
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the city
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have
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or
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buses
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and companies for that it is very fast . There are many disadvantages for
children
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growing
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up
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in
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city
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the city
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towards
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city
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life in that old
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is very flexible. Easy
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to
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school and friends
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do not
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have
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traffic . All
children
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know each other
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feeling
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of comfort
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,
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city
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it
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is very expensive for
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cost
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the cost
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for
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schools and
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needs
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for
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it
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is max .
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, the weather is very nice because
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the fresh
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air
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have many cars or restaurants. In conclusion , there are many advantages and disadvantages
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childern
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children
life in the
city
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there are both for the
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children
to live in the countryside .
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