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Some people think that being vegetarian causes some damages on our health. Do u agree or disagree

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Some people think that
damages
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for
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 our health
caused
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 by being vegetarian. I partially agree with
this
 statement because being vegetarian can’t bring
to
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us some vitamins.
However
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 vegetarians are more easily keep fit, because of eating vegetables and fruits. Being vegetarian can
be causes
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injure
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on
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 our health. Bеcause deficit of
meat
 can lead to some
decease
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diseases
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,
such
 as lack of
the
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energy and vitamins.
For
instance
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 when we don’t eat
meat
 we are not productive and have
headache
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Therefore
, people who eat
meat
are
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live longer.
On the other hand
,
trend
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 of being vegan is healthier for keeping our body in shape.
Because snacking
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with
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 vegetables and
type
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types
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 of hale grasses can help us
to
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get nutrients.
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, it’s recommended
from
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 diet doctors to consume more agricultural products to avoid overwatering.
Thus
 vegetarians have more
nutrition
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 snacks that make them healthier. In conclusion,
trend
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the trend
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 of being vegan has benefits,
however
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 the damages are still more. If vitamins in
meat
 could be eaten by vegetarians,
then
 I wouldn’t
be agreeing
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 with the statement, that being vegan hurts our
body
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 health. I partially agree, because people need
meat
 nutrition in their food to be more active and energetic.
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