The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in 

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.
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The bar graph compares the population of two different genders pursuing
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continuing education in Britain and whether they are doing it as full-timers or part-timers. These cover the years 1970 and 1990. In general, there are more students attending part-time education compared to full-timers for both male and female genders.
Moreover
, the number of women shows an increasing trend over the period of time, for both casual and employed full-time, meanwhile, men's showing unusual trends. Starting with, the male individuals, particularly the full-time employees, it shows that in 1970 there were only a few people studying
while
working with around 150,000,
then
after a year it increased to approximately 180,000, until it rose again to more than 200,000 in 1990.
Hence
, for casual employees, since, they have more time to study, their figures are much higher.
Firstly
, 1000,000 in 1970, but the following year 1980 it falls to around 900,000
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until it increases to more than 900,000 respectively in the
last
period (1990).
By contrast
, females who are employed full-time are very minimal with just 3000, compared to those having casual contracts more than 600,000 in 1970.
While
, in the next year the former increases to 200,000, the same with the latter to 800,000.
Although
, employees full-time slightly rose to more than 200,000 respectively in 1990 the number of part-timers went up to less than 1200,000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • part-time education
  • further education
  • gender comparison
  • trend analysis
  • notable increase
  • decrease
  • consistent trend
  • educational patterns
  • substantial differences
  • preferences
  • evolve
  • societal factors
  • economic influences
  • accessibility
  • job market
  • gender roles
  • projections
  • implications
  • educational policy
  • workforce development
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